Song Idea

Hey guys! I just did a post not too long before this one, but I just wanted to let you guys know about some stuff that I've been working on. I've been trying my hardest to come up with some good death metal songs--or even just some riffs. It's been hard, but I got one song done, actually quite some time ago, but I just wanted to share it with you all. I titled the song "Your Last Lie," which may be subject to change, because now I don't think the song is quite what I want it to sound like anymore.

To me, this song sounds like it may be more like a Metal-Core type of song, as opposed to a Death Metal sounding tune. I've been trying to rework it a little to sound more in the vain of something like Suffocation. But for some reason, I can't make it sound really cool.

I don't know who will read this post, but hopefully it's someone who's more skilled in the art of Death Metal than I am. Maybe I'm just overthinking it, I don't know, but any help or opinions would be of great value.

Here's what I got, sorry about the quality: